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Lay.
Relax.
in my bed.
with me.
We're only teens..
we're allowed to do stupid things
As long as you don't tell.
Blame it on the age
Blame it on the rage
Just don't blame me
We're stupid teens
we're supposed to do stupid things
You're sound asleep
You left me awake
with nothing
But your quiet body
At first you hesitate
Then your eyes roll in the back of your head.
After you come to realization
You beg me to stop.
Come on, babe
You know you like it.
At least pretend.
We're only teens..
we're allowed to do stupid things
The next morning
No words are conversed
We pretend nothing happened
But we both know in our hearts
We're only teens..
we're supposed to do stupid things
But this time I've gone too far.
I'll Try to love you
Until next year
When the baby is due in 3 months
I'll leave you.
Hurt.
We're only teens..
we're allowed to do stupid things
You'll never trust another man
Or let him touch you like I did
He won't understand why
and he'll leave you too.
Why no abortion babe?
It's not like she'll have a father
You dirty slut.
©2006-2009 ~captsnow
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Author's Comments

A girl getting raped, her man leaving her.
Typical rape relationship story.... :\

Comments


:iconmannie15:
eee... I'm shocked.. ^^; nice point of view, I've got to say.. Hym, but the poem.. Is good :XD:

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Pamietam mowil, ach chcialbym sobie postrzelac
Wiesz, do dziewczyn na ulicy, w bialy dzien, teraz
Nie do zwyklych dziewczyn, ale do tych najpiekniejszych
Chcialbym patrzec im w oczy jak marnieja i wiedna
//Myslovitz//
:iconcaptsnow:
Thank you so much, I really appreciate it.
:icondarkdaughter:
that's pretty messed up...so sad...

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"Blood's thicker than water...you'll learn that"
:iconremaen:
Wow, I like it.. o:
Not sure what else to say, but it's.. brilliant.

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Get in there! You - are - my - eyes.
:iconwishingwellofwonder:
god this hits home....

i would tell u this was fabulous if i could stop crying. this happened to my best friend.....its how i got my precious niece...

you have a gift
:iconaestheticirony:
Oh, that's amazing. My favorite part is the "Blame it on the age/ Blame it on the rage" part. Amazing. ^_^

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some men die under the mountains just looking for gold
some die looking for a hand to hold
:iconzmanzdaonlyman4me:
Wow!

That is amazing.

No, its horrible! (the rape)

but amazing! (the poem)

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"You know that whole Love Thy Neighbor thing? I meant it." - God.
:iconwhiterabbit-hansy:
Wow, this poem is amazing. You created such a perfect atmosphere for the piece and the language you used such as "babe" made it hit really close to home when you think about your own relationships and how your boyfriends call you the exact same thing. I loved the

"You're sound asleep
You left me awake
with nothing
But your quiet body"

it makes you realise how vulnerable you can be with someone you're so close to.

I love this, what more can i say?

xoxo-hannah-xoxo
:iconnumbakruncha:
Geez. Thats a strong poem. I really like it, I never thought about that side of rape before. Nice work!!

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